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Chrickeswe Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 10 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 27 Location : Sweden
| Subject: Chrickeswe's Character profile Tue Jun 26, 2012 3:26 pm | |
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Player Name: Chrickeswe
Character Name: Kakazu
Character Full Name: Kakazu Demonheart
Affiliation(s): The Demonheart Clan
Class: Death Knight
Race: Blood elf
Alignment: He is now following Lilanie in hunger for power but he doesn't trust her and if he gets stronger, you probably know what will happen.
Faith: He doesn't have one.
Build: Speed and strentgh, toughness
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Height: 1.78
Weight: 86.3
Eye Color: Black
Hair Style & Color: Fox tail, black colour
Skin/fur Color: Red skin
Armor/Garment Type: He uses leather,mail and plate.
Usual Attire: Black clothes
Personality: Sadistic and emotionless, doesn't trust anyone else but himself
History: He was born in a clan name The Demonheart Clan. In the clan they lived on power and to fight and kill. His parents were Miranda Demonheart and Alucard Demonheart. Alucard trained Kakazu as he grew up, but one day something happened to Kakazu which made him lose control of himself and killed the whole clan, now he is the only survivor and he seeks salvation through fighting and killing people for his wrath. | |
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Chrickeswe Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 10 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 27 Location : Sweden
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Tue Jun 26, 2012 3:31 pm | |
| I will have to correct the story. I missed alot on it and failed | |
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Chrickeswe Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 10 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 27 Location : Sweden
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Tue Jun 26, 2012 3:36 pm | |
| History: Kakazu was born by his parents Miranda Demonheart and Alucard Demonheart. He had no friends and because of that he trained every day to get strong. His clan lived on fighting each other and the strongest one was feared, Kakazu wanted to be feared and treated with respect. And one day he got strongest and beat his father in fair combat. But later on that night his father was signed on a contract to kill Kakazu in his sleep. Unfortnunately Kakazu had overheard his conversation and waited for him on his room. After the murder of his father he felt forced to kill his whole clan, even his innocent mother.. But when Kakazu escaped the clan succesfully after slaughtering them he swore to avenge them on the men who made his father sign the contract. He then trained again and once day a strange woman appeared in the mists asking him to follow her, he tried to kill her but she defeated him very easily. He growled in anger when he said yes, now he is following her to get stronger and to be able to avenge his clan. | |
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Chrickeswe Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 10 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 27 Location : Sweden
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Tue Jun 26, 2012 3:38 pm | |
| and on the race thing I forgot to mention that he's demon too, thats why he has a red skin | |
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sleikas11 Builder GM
Posts : 83 Gold : 168 Renown : 5 Join date : 2012-04-08 Age : 32 Location : Lithuania
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Tue Jun 26, 2012 4:18 pm | |
| I don't want to bea dick....but I am, the story, crarakter profile overall is a mess, the stor yitself must be atleast 3 pharagraphs long and last name 'demonhearth' ..is..well jsut weird, and half demon?waht his father screwed a sucubus or someting?becouse story does not mention anything about drinking fellblood and shit..and how did he becamed a deathknigth they arent just..born you know ......wait did you said alucard?...So..hes a demon whitch has been trained by Dracula xD...sorry for being a jerk but...thats not creative at all, story somewhat reminds me of naturo, not sure why thou, ANYWAY, I'm afraid either start over whit this couse this carakter is
-Denied-
I suggest you scrap this and start over , look at other peoples charakter profiles to get the idea of how it should look like or someting | |
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Chrickeswe Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 10 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 27 Location : Sweden
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Wed Jun 27, 2012 3:25 am | |
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Enkas Brave
Posts : 8 Gold : 14 Renown : 0 Join date : 2012-06-27
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Wed Jul 04, 2012 10:25 am | |
| Wow... Just wow.... Even the first glance at the application, tells me, that you know little to nothing about blood elven lore... Further reading made me sure that you also don't know lot about writing stories, nor you know of demons or death knights...
First of all... Age 19? Did you know, that it is quite little for an elf?
The shortness of your story... Not only it's short, but it is also even less original than Twilight...
Man, you could at least told how he became a death knight... And what kind of death knight? 2nd gen? 3rd gen? One does not simply train to be a death knight... He has to be killed and ressurected.
And then that demon part?... I don't have much to say about it. Please read more of lore before posting character applications. | |
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Rakos High Chieftain
Posts : 323 Gold : 597 Renown : 13 Join date : 2011-12-09 Location : Colorado
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Wed Jul 04, 2012 10:49 am | |
| You could have been a little less harsh, Enkas. Still, you are not incorrect. Although, 19 may be young for an Elf but all races reach physical maturity at around age 18. They may not necessarily be treated as an adult in their respective societies, but they aren't infants. | |
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MagicalRaccoon Brave
Posts : 77 Gold : 71 Renown : 6 Join date : 2012-06-26 Age : 30 Location : United States
| Subject: Re: Chrickeswe's Character profile Wed Jul 04, 2012 12:28 pm | |
| Could you possibly edit your posts to make it so that everything is in one chunk, Chrickeswe? | |
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